I changed the headline and lost the only clear sentence
The old headline was plain and a little dull. The new one sounds sharper and two people asked what the product actually does. I think I optimized for taste.
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One change, then stop. Address "The old headline was plain and a little dull" and leave the rest of the product alone for a week.
Put both in front of someone who is not a founder. Founders are too good at filling in the gaps.
Dull and specific beat sharp and vague on mine. If a stranger cannot repeat the sentence after one read, I revert it.
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